Hi guys this is my improved sentence. Can you comment on my blog.
Before
The great ship sailed majestically until the silly rode into a nice wave and everyone got wet.
After
The magnificent ship voyage terrifically until the unintelligent captain steered into a monstrous tsunami and made everyone soaked.
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